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As you may have read in an earlier entry, I'm working on my short film and the past couple of weeks, I've had to come up with ideas (the movie is to be 30-60 secs long). I had to discuss my ideas with my class on Wednesday, and I've ditched one, leaving me with 2. I'm not sure which to go with yet, so your input would really be appreciated!
Story one
Movie starts out as a view of a ski slope. The camera pulls back, and you realise it's actually just a picture in a brochure. You then see a guy sitting at his table, head resting on his hand, he has a gloomy face. His money box is next to him, and there's only one penny in it.
(Character: chubby, has a likeable appearance about him. I already know the character since it'll be one provided by the school)
He turns around fairly slowly to walk out of the room. As he gets to the top of the stairs, he looks around (to sell the thought process) and has a eureka moment. He runs back into his room, and eyes up the table. He pulls a saw from behind his back (cartoon style), jumps on the table, and begins sawing away. Camera fades to show time passing. His table is now in bits on the floor, but he is holding two skis and poles! He puts them on his feet, and waddles out of the door to the top of the stairs. The camera is at the bottom of the stairs looking up, and you see two ski tips edging forward at the top. Now from the characters viewpoint, he pulls a plan out of his pocket. It shows that he will crash into a pile of pillows at the bottom. As he lowers the paper, you see the pillows, piled high. He puts the paper away, waddles forward a little further. He pulls down his goggles over his eyes, and pushes himself off.
He zooms down the stairs uncontrollably. **Getting to the bottom, he completely misses the pile of pillows, instead flying through a doorway that wasn't in shot previously. You hear a loud crash, and the screen fades to black (perhaps to roll credits). Camera fades in, and we see he is laying in the bath, goggles bent, bits of wood everywhere, one leg hanging out of the bath, maybe a rubber duck on his head. Fade to black.
** Now, this was my original plan. However, after discussion with my classmates, it was agreed that this ending is perhaps too predictable/cliched. So I'd like to come up with another ending. One person suggested he crashes into the freezer so he ends up surrounded by ice. Another suggested he crashes into the pillows, and the feathers fall like snow around him.
Wherever he ends up, it was also suggested that he then gets the brochure out again, and looks for more things to do. This could go two ways, either looking for something more daring (e.g. parachuting), or less daring (e.g. a beach holiday).
Story two
First thing we see is the character laying in bed. He has one eye wide open, staring at the alarm clock beside his bed. As soon as the clock hits 8am (or whenever), the doorbell rings. The guy throws off his duvet, and we see he's already fully dressed. He jumps out of bed and runs downstairs to the front door.
Opening his front door, there's a big package on his doorstep. A bird is sitting on it, pecking away. With some effort, the guy shoes it away, and his excitment returns. He picks up the package, takes it inside and shuts his door.
We now see him unpackaging it - it's a model boat kit. He takes the pieces out of the box and begins assembling it. Using camera fades to indicate passing time, he very carefully puts bits together, until finally it is complete.
He picks up the boat, grabs his sailor hat and runs out the door. The next we see of him, he is standing at the side of a pond. He lowers the boat into the water and pushes it off, and can hardly contain his excitment now. The boat floats and bobs around a bit - but then the bird from earlier flies in, and lands on it.
At this point there's a big, overly dramatic sinking sequence. Very cartoony and over the top. Probably some glug glug sound effect. Now looking at the guy again, his jaw is almost hitting the floor. His shock turns to anger, he takes off his hat, and throws it into the pond, turns around and storms off.
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I don't know if the ending to this one is quite strong enough, so there may need to be something additional.
Anyway, those are my ideas, any suggestions or opinions would be really useful to me at this stage - I'll naturally include you in the credits if anything substantial is suggested.
Thanks!
Story one
Movie starts out as a view of a ski slope. The camera pulls back, and you realise it's actually just a picture in a brochure. You then see a guy sitting at his table, head resting on his hand, he has a gloomy face. His money box is next to him, and there's only one penny in it.
(Character: chubby, has a likeable appearance about him. I already know the character since it'll be one provided by the school)
He turns around fairly slowly to walk out of the room. As he gets to the top of the stairs, he looks around (to sell the thought process) and has a eureka moment. He runs back into his room, and eyes up the table. He pulls a saw from behind his back (cartoon style), jumps on the table, and begins sawing away. Camera fades to show time passing. His table is now in bits on the floor, but he is holding two skis and poles! He puts them on his feet, and waddles out of the door to the top of the stairs. The camera is at the bottom of the stairs looking up, and you see two ski tips edging forward at the top. Now from the characters viewpoint, he pulls a plan out of his pocket. It shows that he will crash into a pile of pillows at the bottom. As he lowers the paper, you see the pillows, piled high. He puts the paper away, waddles forward a little further. He pulls down his goggles over his eyes, and pushes himself off.
He zooms down the stairs uncontrollably. **Getting to the bottom, he completely misses the pile of pillows, instead flying through a doorway that wasn't in shot previously. You hear a loud crash, and the screen fades to black (perhaps to roll credits). Camera fades in, and we see he is laying in the bath, goggles bent, bits of wood everywhere, one leg hanging out of the bath, maybe a rubber duck on his head. Fade to black.
** Now, this was my original plan. However, after discussion with my classmates, it was agreed that this ending is perhaps too predictable/cliched. So I'd like to come up with another ending. One person suggested he crashes into the freezer so he ends up surrounded by ice. Another suggested he crashes into the pillows, and the feathers fall like snow around him.
Wherever he ends up, it was also suggested that he then gets the brochure out again, and looks for more things to do. This could go two ways, either looking for something more daring (e.g. parachuting), or less daring (e.g. a beach holiday).
Story two
First thing we see is the character laying in bed. He has one eye wide open, staring at the alarm clock beside his bed. As soon as the clock hits 8am (or whenever), the doorbell rings. The guy throws off his duvet, and we see he's already fully dressed. He jumps out of bed and runs downstairs to the front door.
Opening his front door, there's a big package on his doorstep. A bird is sitting on it, pecking away. With some effort, the guy shoes it away, and his excitment returns. He picks up the package, takes it inside and shuts his door.
We now see him unpackaging it - it's a model boat kit. He takes the pieces out of the box and begins assembling it. Using camera fades to indicate passing time, he very carefully puts bits together, until finally it is complete.
He picks up the boat, grabs his sailor hat and runs out the door. The next we see of him, he is standing at the side of a pond. He lowers the boat into the water and pushes it off, and can hardly contain his excitment now. The boat floats and bobs around a bit - but then the bird from earlier flies in, and lands on it.
At this point there's a big, overly dramatic sinking sequence. Very cartoony and over the top. Probably some glug glug sound effect. Now looking at the guy again, his jaw is almost hitting the floor. His shock turns to anger, he takes off his hat, and throws it into the pond, turns around and storms off.
---
I don't know if the ending to this one is quite strong enough, so there may need to be something additional.
Anyway, those are my ideas, any suggestions or opinions would be really useful to me at this stage - I'll naturally include you in the credits if anything substantial is suggested.
Thanks!
I'm not a fan of the second story at all, but thats just my views. First one sounds brilliant